please check my design #27157542 feedback please

Hi dear client, i recently submitted one design to your contest and i am now asking for a feedback so i can revise and modify it following your guidelines, thanks.
My submission: #27166765

Hi :) ratings and comment appreciated thanks :)

Greetings! I've made a submission and wanted to invite you to take a look. I can revise anything you need at your request, whether that's fonts and text style, overall 'feel' (e.g. not upmarket enough), or anything else. Just let me know.