Kindly provide your feedback on my entry work, thanks

I found that you liked my design #21673184. Now can you please send me some feedbacks and changes(if you have any)so that I can improve my design . Your feedbacks are extremely valuable for me to get the best designs for your brand. Willing to get an opportunity to work with you.

Feedback please.

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Hello Project Owner,
Thank you for inviting me with your project.
I've submitted some design proposals for your logo design according to your brief.
Please review my design and let me know if I am on right track and If you're looking for different designs, please let me know if you need any changes. If you don't like the design simply eliminate it, but don't rate it with 1, 2, 3 star.
Possible comment on my design would be much appreciated.
Thanks & regards,
Slant Line Media